Week 8


Essay 2 - Submission tips: Revision includes major additions, deletions, and restructuring. Make sure that major additions are highlighted yellow, deletions red. If your rough draft on 2/28 was partial, you might choose to


Never submit a written assignment or share a formal written document without proofreading it twice for errors.

Review of some common errors that you can fix in proofreading: Proofreading Bingo Cards Link

Proofreading - round one

1. Share your revised draft with a partner

2. Identify an error

3. Get the prof. to verify and share with class

4. Repeat

Proofreading - round two

1. Review your own revised draft

2. Identify an error

3. Get the prof. to verify and share with class

4. Repeat

1.) Please finish proofreading your argument (Essay 02) and upload both the rough and final draft via D2L before midnight today.

2.) Read Kim, Lindsey “Understanding and Maintaining Your Privacy When Writing With Digital Technologies” via D2L Perusall. Note we haven't used Perusall in a few weeks, but this is the tool that asks you to comment in the margins as one way of showing you've done the reading!


Privacy, Writing, Digital Technologies.

Basic conceptions of privacy have been revolutionized in a generation, largely by changes in technology and our acceptance of them. In 1995, most US households had a single phone and no internet. There were 90 million landlines but 20 million of those were unlisted NYT. An unlisted number meant your name was not printed in the telephone book; only people to whom you shared your number could contact you. When someone called, anyone in the house knew; if you were speaking with a friend, your parents or little brother could pick up the phone at any time.

Think about how things have changed. In the year 2000, just over 50% of American's owned a cell phone; by 2014 53.6% of Americans had a smart phone Statistica, a number which has reached 86% today Statistica.

TikTok reports they have 138 million users in the US in February, 32% of whom are between 10 and 18 years of age, using the platform to communicate with a few friends or with thousands of followers. On Twitter, the average user has 700 followers Social Pilot. Instagram has 1.22 billion monthly users, “equivalent to the population of the EU and North America combined” Social Pilot

What difference does it make when one is writing, speaking, photographing, or video taping for oneself, a few friends, an audience of friends and family, or the whole world? What's the difference between a Tweet and an email, between a memo and a text message, between a Wikipedia article and a viral TikTok? The third essay you write for ENGL 101 will be a rhetorical analysis . You will write, an an academic way, about the relationship between message or content and the style, format, and audience for a piece.

Lindsey Kim,

Let's begin by talking about the message and the style of the piece you read last night

How is this similar to or different from other pieces you read for class or in your research? What is its “style” and audience?

D2L link to Kim reading in Perusall

1.What does the author suggest are some of the benefits of “privacy” in a traditional sense?

2. What is “information” privacy? (Where does Kim explain this?)

Orienting Questions? Before we dive deeply into the reading, are there some things that surprised or puzzled you? Is there anything you feel like we explore together for clarification before we go deeper?


3. Reread and prepare to explain what the article has to say about data (how we generate it, and how it influences what we see and understand)?

4. Reread and prepare to explain how agency works online. What are the complications that filter bubbles create?

5. How does the meta-data classifying us as we travel the web impact us?

6. Why does Kim think it is important for us to think more about information flow?

Whole class

Is the information Kim provides and the argument she makes surprising, provocative, common sense? Have you had the occasion to think deliberately about what you did or did not want to write, photograph or share online?

Activity: Explore, Write in Writer's Journal, Discuss

1. Log in to Google if you have a gmail account, then visit: https://myadcenter.google.com/u/0/. (*You may do this on your phone. Consider what Google “knows” about you because of your search and browsing history.

2. Visit the home of a social media tool, game or other site your frequently use. Search for their terms of service. Can you understand it? Are you comfortable with it? Does it seem to protect your privacy, threaten it or …?

Enjoy your break. We'll be thinking some more about rhetorical situations when we come back. Please read and comment on Laura Carrol's “Backpacks versus Briefcases: Steps Toward Rhetorical Analysis” via D2L Perusall. You should see it as an assignment for your section of ENGL 101.